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Hello readers today i made a very long story that i would like you guys to read

Here it is……  HOPE YOU ENJOY! I also have to include my L.O.  here is my L.O.

• • Add a lot of information to my writing to help my readers understand my ideas.
  • Provide feedback about a classmate’s writing that is positive, thoughtful, and helpful.

• Assess our own writing against the Ideas and Vocab criteria in the writing rubric.

• Assess a classmate’s writing against the Ideas and Vocab criteria in the writing rubric.

here is my story….

I was walking through the forest like I always do. When suddenly I. Started to hear a low growl. I looked around and there was a pack of wolves….. So I started to run. Fortunately I was very Zippy and could out run them.I had been running for ages now but I started to see a giant cliff up ahead I slowed down and they closed in. I got very scared and looked down and saw a river and jumped………. Wait I thought there was someone up there OH NO………… 

    I saw him falling. Then I got struck by relief. When I hit the bottom of the river I swam to the top to see where the other guy was. He had belly flopped. I instantly felt his pain and started to swim towards him. I helped him and said “Hi my name is Jack what’s yours” he responded with “My Name is Axel. We both looked up and saw a standing wolf thing. We instantly ducked under the water so it couldn’t see us.

 After like 30 seconds we went up and swam to the side of the river. We did not know where we were. Then Alex looked up and said “Is that a path in the middle of the cliff” “Yes” I said “that is a path maybe it leads to the top of the cliff”……….. 

But how do we get there………. “Hmm” said Alex “maybe we could climb up there” “Climb all the way up there” “I don’t know if that’s possible I said” “well there’s only one way to find out”

 We started climbing and climbing. I think we at least fell 10 times. Finally we went into the tunnel. And grabbed one of torches and started to run to the top when we got there it didn’t look the same the sky was green the grass was blue it was strangely peaceful we turned around and saw at least 3,000,000 mutants

 We ran the other way. Sadly I was too fast for my new friend so I slowed down and grabbed my new friend. By the hand and pulled him along once we were safe.We ran all the way back so we could get out except we never did……….. 30 years later we had killed at least 2,000,000 mutants and were still killing and the only way to get out was to kill all mutants and once they were all dead there was going to be a demon

named the srt demon. We fought for another 12 years and finally there stood the srt demon. It was the big standing wolf from the start of our journey. It was giant and ruthless. We were throwing spears,knives and shooting bows but we didn’t even scratch the monster. We decided to run and make a new weapon. The new weapon was powered by gems and we went to fight the monster. After ages of fighting we killed the creature. But something strange was happening. The monster was exploding. Everything went black I woke up and it was all a dream.

Hello readers today i will show you explain writing here is mne.

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My favourite place in the world for me would be my birth place which is……….. Australia. I love Australia because it’s my birth place. I also like it because it’s warm there. The other reason I like Australia is because i have more family in Australia

It’s my birth place

My favourite place is……… Australia because it’s my birth place. I was born there and stayed there until I was about 6 months old. I don’t remember much but everyone should go there. Now that I am older, the reason that everyone should go is that they have a wider range of animals like snakes,spiders and even koalas.

It’s A lot warmer than nz

My favourite place is……… Australia because it’s a lot warmer than nz. Australia is really hot and NZ is cold. That’s why I believe that Australia is a lot better than nz. And I reckon that everyone should check it out. You really should.

Most of my family is in australia 

My favourite place is……… Australia because most of my family is in Australia. Most of my family is in Australia. That’s why I think  Australia is a lot better than NZ and other countries. And I want to see the rest of my family.

Conclusion

If you don’t believe me after all of my reasons you should check out my friend’s work. They have plenty of work about some other stuff. I will tell you my reasons all over again firstly is my birth place

 Secondly it’s a lot warmer than nz. Finally, most of my family is in Australia.

Hi readers today i will show you my writing dialogue. Hope you enjoy

Hey readers.

Today I will show you my writing task we had to write a discription about some characters.     HOPE YOU ENJOY!

I went to Akaroa on friday. I hade to say yes sir captin sir. I made a recount about Akoroa. Hope you enjoy mine.

My heart was pounding, the day had come, I was going to Akaroa, It was going to be awesome.

First we had to get to the gym. I was going crazy. While the teachers did the role. Me and my friends just talked for the entire time we were in the gym. We started to walk to the gate. The bus was here. YAY.

After the long dreadful ride we had made it. It was really long and boring. At least half the bus was asleep. When me and Elijah looked around we saw Mr Taylor taking pictures of people sleeping. Me and Elijah were really confused.

We grabbed a snack and went to eat. I got to sit on a real cannon. Me and Jacob shared some shapes together. While the teachers were getting ready for the scavenger hunt. Finally the teachers were ready for the scavenger hunt.

We had started the scavenger hunt first we went to the lighthouse. We all searched for the date that the lighthouse was moved. I took for EVER! The next question was what shape were the lighthouses’ windows. I did not do much because I accidentally ripped my sheet.

After the scavenger hunt we had to put on life jackets. I struggled to put mine on, after we got onto the sailing ship we started to move. It was so fast I nearly threw up after a lot of moving around. I was going to steer the ship. I was so excited. I was talking to Mj for a very long time.
Apparently Mr Taylor saw a dolphin. When we got back we had some lunch.

Then It was the LONG! Dreadful bus ride home. I sat next to Elijah and he fell asleep straight away. It took me a long time to go to sleep. We slept for at least an hour. I had to wake Elijah when we were there. Again Mr Taylor was taking pictures of people sleeping. I kept telling him to stop.